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Dance of The Fallen

I walk onto the dance floor
And am surrounded by ghosts of summer's past
They dance around me wearing faceless masks
Each move with such grace and beauty
I know it is too good to last
Faster and faster the figures dance
To soon do I stumble
Giving myself away
Each covered face turns my way
Suspecting me of being something
Different, Strange
I realize then I am not a faceless creature
A hateful bane
I am bright and vibrant
Something that should not be covered
Or smothered by other's selfish spite
I reject your masks
Your hateful ways
For I am me and I will never be tamed
So I continue dancing in this
Masquerade
A prompt for the group :iconheart-of-poetry: thought this reflected how i felt about people and their many faces.. and how i refuse to be anyone other then me.

My wonderful friend :iconsilentsouldeathspoon: gets credit for the title. :D She is amazing!

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KodokuNoNana Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2012   General Artist
I love this poem <3 [and also the mask in the photo, I usually love masks :) ]
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checkyeschloe Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
As do I :D i use this metaphor alot in my writing. :D Im so glad you like it!! :huggle: thank you
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Nightwarrier Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2012  Student Photographer
Love it! So true and very well said :D
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checkyeschloe Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!! :D :tighthug:
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Nightwarrier Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2012  Student Photographer
My pleasure :D
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checkyeschloe Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:D :tighthug:
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nighthawk81 Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2012
Interesting ... this one reminds me of one of my older works.

[link]

Perhaps worth a look-see?
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checkyeschloe Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you and i commented! :D i really love your style of poetry.
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nighthawk81 Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2012
Some day maybe I'll share the rest of them. My best friend (and best man at my wedding), The Man Of A Thousand Handles, has turned many of my somrwhat-adequate poems into songs. I suppose I will have to double-check with him before I post any more of the collaborative works.
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checkyeschloe Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:D i would love to see your work. Your a very talented writer. :) Haha i just would be happy if i could get my poems published someday. fingers crossed lol but im only 19 so no one really wants to read my work.. :P lol oh well.. i have always been more mature then my age. I say i was born 35 while im actually 19 lol :P but then again i guess im just an old soul i really have no idea how that happened lol :D
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nighthawk81 Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012
Dear girl, there is no such thing as "only" 19 years old. Virginia Cary Hudson was only 10 when she wrote the essays that eventually became "O Ye Jigs and Juleps!" (Wikipedia link follows ...) [link] (The fact that she wrote them in 1904 and they were not published until 1962 is beside the point.)

I know the part about being more mature than my age ... I was accused of that frequently in high school. (Now, however, it appears to be an inverse function ... I spend as much time watching Marx Brothers, Three Stooges, classic Warner Brothers Looney Tunes, and Disney Channel as I do anything else.) My parents frequently asked me to stand quiet when we went to some venue or function with discounts for kids; they seemed to think that if I started speaking, the venue operators wouldn't believe I was "under 10" or "under 12" or whatever age restriction got me the discount.

Just remember ... "Age is a case of mind over matter; if you don't mind, it doesn't matter."

Be well, my dear.
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checkyeschloe Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:D aww well thank you for the advice! I got to see my sailor this weekend and it was so worth the trip. I really missed him :heart: i cant wait till he comes home from A school! :iconblushplz: 4 more months!
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crazi-4-muffinz Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Woah this is awesome! Why was I not watching you sooner??
& I love the picture at the top, too! :heart:
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checkyeschloe Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:D thank you kindly! :heart: poetry is my passion.
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crazi-4-muffinz Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome :heart:
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checkyeschloe Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:D
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ThatCanonKid Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Student Writer
I've put this forward for my vote to be featured. Love it, ^^
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checkyeschloe Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:D thank you!! :heart:
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SilentSoulDeathSpoon Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This reminds me so much of a poem I wrote long ago. The words and phrases are spot on. It's just beautiful. Don't change it- leave it be. This piece is just amazing- speaking so loud of denying becoming a faceless conformist with no heart or personality and staying the way you should- which is yourself. Well done! I love it!
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checkyeschloe Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:D Thank you!!! :tighthug: it means so much that you love it. :heart: i truly thought it needed more work. But im happy you like it so much. It means alot to me and i hate how people just expect me to fall into line.. which i wont ever do.. I am ME and that is who i will be forever. :heart: why not embrace it? ;) lol thank you again.
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SilentSoulDeathSpoon Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome, my dear :)
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checkyeschloe Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:tighthug: your the best big sister ever!! :heart:
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